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Freak 
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Me Presentation
Good morning
Let me introduce you at first myself
my name is Amrinder Singh and I am 16 Years. I was born in Hamburg and my parents are from India. I have one Brother he is 18 years old. He is going to the school, too. Next year he will get his high school diploma. My Mom is working as a waiter and my dad is working as a cook. They are really rarely at home. But that isn’t a problem because I think we are old enough to supply ourselves.
In the school is my favorite subject music. To make music is my hobby, I covering a lot of songs with my band. I am playing electric guitar and piano. I have earned money with working and bought all that. I don’t get pocket-money but that’s usually in Indian families. So I have to working hard for a lot of things. I started playing keyboard at the age of 10 years. I taught it myself but I never really play it serious. 1 year ago I started to play seriously. I have started to learn piano with reading a lot of lessons in the internet. One year later I bought an electric guitar. I have taught electric guitar myself. It’s really hard to teach it myself but I haven’t enough money to learn it at a teacher. I am playing in a band, too. Playing electric guitar is a really expensive hobby so it’s important to work for money and buying new equipment. I am really happy with playing guitar and I hope that I someday can make my money with making music. I am working really hard to achieve my dream.
Okay now I tell something about my future. At first of all I want to finish that school with good marks and start on a technical grammar school. I am really interested in physics. Someday I want to have a good job. I don’t want to be a little man in the big world. I want to have a good job like a pilot. I know its hard to be a pilot. But if I work hard enough I can reach everything. That is the thing that I have learned in my life. I hope you enjoyed my presentation about myself.
BITTE KORRIGIERN UND VORSCHLÄGE MACHEN WAS ICH NOCH HINZUFÜGEN SOLL IST FÜR MEINE PRÜFUNG DARF NICHT LÄNGER ALS 3 MIN DAUERN!
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michse02
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Me Presentation
Good morning
Let me introduce myself.
My name is Amrinder Singh and I am 16 Years. I was born in Hamburg and my parents are from India. I have one 18 year old Brother. He is going to school, too. Next year he will get his high school diploma. My Mom is working as a waiter and my dad as a cook. They are really rarely at home. But that isn’t a problem because I think we are old enough to supply ourselves.
In the school is my favorite subject music. To make music is my hobby, I am covering a lot of songs with my band. I am playing electric guitar and piano. I have earned money with working and bought all that. I don’t get pocket-money but that’s usually in Indian families. So I have to work hard for a lot of things. I started playing keyboard at the age of 10. I taught it myself but I never really play it serious. 1 year ago I started to play seriously. I have started to learn piano with reading a lot of lessons in the internet. One year later I bought an electric guitar. I have taught electric guitar myself. It’s really hard to teach it myself but I haven’t enough money to learn it at a teacher. I am playing in a band, too. Playing electric guitar is a really expensive hobby so it’s important to work for money and buying new equipment. I am really happy with playing guitar and I hope that I someday can make my money with making music. I am working really hard to achieve my dream.
Okay now I tell something about my future. At first of all I want to finish that school with good marks and start on a technical grammar school. I am really interested in physics. Someday I want to have a good job. I don’t want to be a little man in the big world. I want to have a good job like a pilot. I know its hard to be a pilot. But if I work hard enough I can reach everything. That is the thing that I have learned in my life. I hope you enjoyed the presentation about myself.
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high school diploma <-- sicher?
dann ist mir inhaltlich aufgefallen das du einmal geld mit musik machen verdienen willst und einmal pilot werden willst... Was denn nun?
Und deine Zeiten passen nicht. Du hüpfst kreuz und quer zwischen present, past usw hin und her. darauf hin solltest du das nochmal korrektur lesen... weitere anmerkungen siehe in dem Zitat...
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Freak
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high school diploma hab ich im leo wörterbuch (online) nachgesehen heißt abitur.
Mit den beiden Jobs mein ich das ich halt so als Ausweichmöglichkeit oder so. Wie soll ich das sagen?
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05.04.2008 19:12 |
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michse02
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achso ok.
hm, dann lass das mit den Jobs so...
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Freak
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Hmm Ok. Hab das jetzt überarbeitet
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Me Presentation
Good morning. (Gibts noch ne andere möglichkeit den Prüfern irgendwie zu sagen wenn man anfängt? Find das so schlicht)
Let me introduce myself.
My name is Amrinder Singh and I am 16 years old. I was born in Hamburg and my parents are from India. I have got an one 18 years old brother. He goes to school, too. Next year he will pass his high school diploma. My mom works as a waiter and my dad as a cook. They are really rare at home. But that isn’t a problem because I think we are old enough to look after ourselves.
At school my favorite subject is music. Making music is my hobby; I cover a lot of songs with my band. Mostly we cover Punk Rock songs. The reason for that is, playing punk rock is really easy. I play an electric guitar and piano. I have earned money with working hardly for buying all that equipment. I don’t get pocket-money but that’s usually in Indian families. So I have to work hard for a lot of things I need. But that fact could be bright, too. I am now self employed.
Ok back to my past!
I have started playing keyboard at the age of 10. I have taught it myself but I have never really played it serious. 1 year ago I started to play seriously. I have started to learn piano with reading a lot of lessons in the internet. One year later I bought an electric guitar. I have taught playing electric guitar myself. It’s really hard to teach it himself but I haven’t enough money to learn it with a teacher. I play in a band, too. Playing electric guitar is a really expensive hobby so it’s important to work for money and buying new equipment. I am really happy with playing guitar and I hope that I someday can make a living from making music. I work really hard to achieve my dream.
But I have a lot of another hobby, too. Like playing football, playing computer, and meeting friends.
Okay now I will tell you something about my future. First of all I want to finish that school with good marks and start on a technical grammar school. I am really interested in physics and science. Someday I want to have a good job. I don’t want to be a little man in the big world. I want to be a rich man in the little world. But to be rich don’t mean to have a lot of money. It means to be intelligent, to learn if you failure, to patient etc. I never saw a rich dumbass.
I want to be a rock star like I said before. I know it’s hard to be a successful in that ambit. But if I work hard enough I will reach that and every other thing. That is the lesson that I have learned in my life.
I made a poster with the main information about myself.
Here you can read… (Blablabla)
…and here you can see a picture of me. I was 3 Years old.
I hope you enjoyed the presentation about myself.
Das ist der Vortrag text den muss ich nicht abgeben also sind nur grammatische fehler wichtig nich groß und klein schreibung oder so^^
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michse02
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Me Presentation
Good morning.
Please let me introduce myself.
My name is Amrinder Singh and I am 16 years old. I was born in Hamburg and my parents are from India. I have got an 18 years old brother. He goes to school, too. Next year he will pass his high school diploma. My mom works as a waiter and my dad as a cook. They are really rare at home. But that isn’t a problem because I think we are old enough to look after ourselves.
At school my favorite subject is music. Making music is my hobby; I cover a lot of songs with my band. Mostly we cover Punk Rock songs. The reason for that is, playing punk rock is really easy. I play an electric guitar and piano. I have earned money with working hardly for buying all that equipment. I don’t get pocket-money but that’s usually in Indian families. So I have to work hard for a lot of things I need. But that fact could be bright, too. I am now self employed.
Ok back to my past!
I have started playing keyboard at the age of 10. I have taught it myself but I have never really played it serious. 1 year ago I started to play seriously. I have started to learn piano with reading a lot of lessons in the internet. One year later I bought an electric guitar. I have taught playing electric guitar myself. It’s really hard to teach it myself but I haven’t enough money to learn it by a teacher. I play in a band, too. Playing electric guitar is a really expensive hobby so it’s important to work for money to buy new equipment. I am really happy with playing guitar and I hope that I someday can make a living from making music. I work really hard to achieve my dream.
But I have a lot of other hobbies, too. Like playing football, playing computer, and meeting friends.
Okay now I will tell you something about my future. First of all I want to finish that school with good marks and start on a technical grammar school. I am really interested in physics and science. Someday I want to have a good job. I don’t want to be a little man in the big world. I want to be a rich man in the little world. But to be rich doesn't mean to have a lot of money. It means to be intelligent, to learn if you failure, to patient etc. I never saw a rich dumbass.
I want to be a rock star like I said before. I know it’s hard to be a successful in that ambit. But if I work hard enough I will reach that and every other thing. That is the lesson that I have learned in my life.
I made a poster with the main information about myself.
Here you can read… (Blablabla)
…and here you can see a picture of me. I was 3 Years old.
I hope you enjoyed the presentation about myself.
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ich würds so machen. aber ich bin auch kein Lehrer 
Und das Good morning finde ich ok. Man sollte schon erstmal grüßen...
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Bin auf der Suche nach mir selbst und daher vorübergehend nicht anzutreffen.
Wir würden uns freuen, wenn ihr uns weiterempfehlt
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Freak
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Ok danke! Hab euch weiterempfholen
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07.04.2008 21:03 |
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Lighty
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Ok danke! Hab euch weiterempfholen
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... hört/liest man immer gerne ! Thx !
Da Englisch nicht wirklich meine Stärke ist, habe ich mich auch schön rausgehalten !
( michse ist jünger und da definitiv aktueller ) 
Was mich aber definitiv stört ist das "got" im folgenden Satz :
I have got an 18 years old brother.
( I have an 18 years old brother. ) !?
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08.04.2008 12:42 |
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Freak
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Joa egal ist nur der text den ich so in etwa sagen werde ich lies doch nich alles ab. wenn ichs sag dann ists sowieso immer richtig weil man im kopf immer auffällt was falsch ist. schnell im kopf korrigiern und ausm mund ausprchen
naja ich habs hinter mir. mathe und detsch folgt für die prüfung
in englisch aber hab ich ne glatte
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michse02
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glückwunsch
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Freak
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Danke Danke
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Lighty
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... mmmmh !? ... gibts dafür Provisionen !?
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Impressum
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